How to Write Sneaky Characters

My advice on characters today concerns how to write sneaky characters. I had to create one in my second novel, A Storm of Doubts, and he proved to be a challenge.

What Do I Mean by Sneaky Characters?

Since I write mysteries, of course the guilty party is always sneaky because he or she has to cover their tracks after committing the crime. But for this post, I’m referring to characters who are sneaky by nature. The weaselly police informant who will tell the cops anything for a price, making his information suspect. The high school girl who is so sweet to everyone’s face and yet anyone who associates with her is always caught up in some kind of drama.

These are characters whose actions, words, and expressions mask their real thoughts and feelings. A writer can approach this character one of two ways–either, the main character (MC) is completely taken in by the performance and the revelation of sneaky character’s true intentions is a big plot twist. Or the MC is suspicious of the sneaky character to begin with or soon after meeting him but has trouble deciding if the character is a sneak or trustworthy.

By the way, if you want your MC to be the sneaky character, you are allowed. Just remember–most readers enjoy a book because the MC is someone they want to spend time with. A sneaky MC could get very old, very fast.

Creating a Sneaky Character

In A Storm of Doubts, I adopted the second way of developing a sneaky character. Rae’s Uncle Troy returns to Marlin County, Ohio, where he grew up. Everyone there knows he’s a grifter, so Rae, my MC, is suspicious of him from the start.

I’ve read a lot about grifters and realized Troy would never be aggressive or combative in any situation. Grifters don’t want to bully you into doing what they want. They want to entice and manipulate you. This is harder to write than a blunt bully. A bully’s intentions are obvious and therefore easy to convey to the reader. Showing Troy entice and manipulate Rae was much harder because I had to write him in subtle lines.

What helped me was to realize Troy would agree to anything anyone said if it gave him an advantage. Unlike a lot of characters, who would take offense at being criticized, Troy goes along with the criticism because agreeing with someone puts him in a position to get closer to them. He’s like a snake who can pivot and twist in any direction he thinks necessary.

In this scene, Rae’s dad, the sheriff, is questioning Troy.

“You need to come up with better excuses.” Dad put away his notepad. “You made a mistake two years ago, and I got jumped. You made a mistake today and put my daughter in danger. You can’t keep saying you make mistakes, Troy. You’re forty-three. Not fourteen.” 

Tory sighed, his tiny mouth drooping. “I’m just not as smart as you are. “

I also use several two-person scene between Rae and Troy so I have the time to describe in more details his expressions and mannerisms and how Rae analyzes them to figure out what her uncle’s true intentions are.

Have you tried to write a sneaky character? What helped you to write them? Who is a convincing sneaky characters in a book or show?

A Storm of Doubts Available Today!

Finally, A Storm of Doubts is available today! Readers can finally get their hands on the latest mystery in the Rae Riley series. I can’t wait for you to return to Marlin County and catch up with Rae, Mal, and their family and friends as a mystery sweeps them into a storm of doubts.

Blurb for Storm

Her dad said nothing could changer their relationship. But what if he wasn’t her dad?

Summer gets off to a rocky start for twenty-year-old Rae Riley when the ex-wife of family friend Jason Carlisle claims their youngest child isn’t his and Rae’s con man uncle Troy returns to Marlin County, Ohio. Rae is already at odds with her father, Sheriff Walter “Mal” Malinowski, over her desire to help people in trouble. When she extends that help to Uncle Troy and Jason’s ex-wife, she and Mal clash even more.

Then the ex-wife disappears, and Jason and his brother Rick are two of the main suspects. As Rae and her Aunt Carrie, a private investigator hired to protect Jason’s kids, work to discover what really happened, Rae wrestles with Troy’s insinuations that she may be calling the wrong Malinowski “Dad.”

Two author friends very kindly provided endorsements for my novel. Laurie’s short story, “Return to Callidora”, is a Christmas fantasy that appears in the same anthology, Christmas fiction off the beaten path, as Rae’s first mystery, “A Rose from the Ashes.” Thank you, ladies!

Jennifer Hallmark, author of Jessie’s Hope and Smoking Flax

“I love YA books and equally enjoy a good mystery. Allen combines both with just the right amount of suspense, whodunnit, and relationships. Rae and her father are still figuring each other out, while Rae is learning to be part of a family. The relational struggles are real and tug at one’s heart. Allen’s settings are described so colorfully I felt I moved alongside the characters. The suspense, especially toward the end, had me reading until late at night. I believe A Storm of Doubts is even better than the first in the series. Don’t miss any of JPC Allen’s books…”

Laurie Lucking, author Common and Traitor

“JPC Allen has done it again, with an immersive writing style that makes readers feel like they’ve seen Marlin County in person! I was swept back into Rae’s world from page one, eager to revisit her library, supportive friends, and eclectic family. The new mystery was complex and multi-layered, forcing our amateur sleuth to grow in faith, trust, and resilience as she faced her doubts head-on. Fans of Rae Riley’s previous adventures won’t want to miss this new installment!”

Just the other day I realized that I’ve written enough in the series that readers might like to know what the chronological order is because it’s not the same as the publication order. Click here and you’ll find the list.

If You Do Buy A Storm of Doubts

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1 Day Until A Storm of Doubts Breaks!

Can’t believe it’s only 1 day until A Storm of Doubts breaks into the world! This book has been a long time a-coming, and at times, I thought it would break me. Throughout March, I’ll be letting you in on the process and inspiration that created Storm. Here’s a sneak peek of the start of the first chapter. My goal in the opening is to hook the reader’s attention with enough questions and tension that they feel compelled to keep reading.

Chapter 1 of A Storm of Doubts

“Just stop it!”

         The shout made me jerk and get poked by a dead branch of a honeysuckle bush.

         Wasn’t that a woman’s voice? Not a girl’s, not my cousin Coral’s.

         Swiveling on my hips, I sat higher and caught strands of my dark gold hair on the bush. The fox cubs or kits or whatevers I’d been photographing leaped and rolled over each other between muted beams of sunlight, undisturbed.

         Two voices, one higher, one lower, slipped through the budding understory shrubs and bushes .

         Who would be out in the woods on the morning of Memorial Day between my cousin’s farm and my dad’s? If we were still on family land. Coral knew exactly where we were, which was why I’d asked her to guide me after she told me about the fox babies. But Coral didn’t care much for civilization and nothing at all for ridiculous things like property boundaries.

         “Coral?” I called, long, white honeysuckle blossoms brushing my cheeks, their thick Easter-y scent clogging my nose.

         When had she left me? I couldn’t have been photographing foxes that long. Although she was the guide, she was only twelve, and I was just a day short of twenty. So it was my responsibility to return Coral home in pristine condition.

         The voices continued, but too quiet for me to catch any words, their murmur blending with the faint rustle of leaves in the morning breeze.

         So Coral might have met someone. But she knew not to talk to strangers.

         I collected my camera and the small tripod it sat on and eased myself backward through the thicket.

         Did not talking to strangers still apply if you met one in the middle of nowhere in the middle of a county as rural as Marlin County, Ohio?

         “Coral?” I ticked up the volume.

         “Leave me alone!” The woman’s voice again. She sounded desperate, not angry.

         “Did you call me, Rae?” Coral seemed to pop out of the morning air. She could move like a ghost in the woods.

         “I wondered where you were.” I closed my tripod. “Did you hear that yell? It sounds like somebody’s in trouble.”

         Removing her baseball hat with a galloping horse on the front, she wiped copper bangs from her sweaty forehead. “Naw. Just some rich chick and her boyfriend.”

         My cousin Amber had mentioned that high school kids used an abandoned bridge as a party site.

         “Did you talk to them?” I placed the camera inside my padded backpack.

         “Nope. I just heard voices and followed them to see what was going on.”

         The distant hum of conversation continued to glide through the cool morning air.

         “You stay here.” I tucked the tripod into a pouch on the outside of the backpack. “I’ll go see if the girl or the woman needs help.”

         “She looked more like a woman. But I said she wasn’t in trouble.”

         “I know, but … well, I’d like to see for myself. I mean, if I were in a lonely spot in the woods with someone upsetting me, I’d want help. Can you lead me to them?”

         Coral squinted at me like I was a new species she’d stumbled across. Then she shrugged and headed for a short slope overgrown with young trees and dense stands of pawpaws.

         An engine roared to life. As it pulled away, another one turned over.

         “Hold on, Coral.” I unzipped a pocket of my cargo pants. “It sounds like they—” Looking at the time on my phone, I gasped.

         “Coral, can we get back to your farm in twenty minutes?”

         “What’s the rush?”

         I stared at her. “Amber and Dad are marching in the Memorial Day parade. He won’t be upset if we miss him, but Amber will be. I promised her I’d take pictures.”

         Coral rolled her brown eyes. “Oh, yeah, I forgot. But she won’t care if I don’t come. She can’t stand me.”

         “That’s not true.” At least, not completely true. The fights Amber and Coral had were more intense than the spats I’d witnessed between my three half-brothers. “Can we get back in time to ride into town with your parents?”

         Coral studied a slug on a rotten log, a frown puckering her pretty,freckled face. “I don’t think so.” Now she looked worried, probably thinking that Uncle Hank and Aunt Jeanine would believe she

deliberately wandered away to miss her older sister’s performance with the band.

         She raised her head. “We’re not far from Walter’s place. Do you think he’d drive us?”

         My anxiety notched a few degrees higher.

         That all depended on what kind of mood we found our great-grandfather in. And Dad and Uncle Hank and Aunt Jeanine would not approve of us going over there without one of them. We never knew

which outlaw relatives might be hanging around Walter’s house.

         But if there was trouble, Coral and I could escape to the woods. Once Coral was in her natural habitat, chances of anyone keeping up were slim.

         “Okay.” I hitched the shoulder straps of my backpack higher. “We’ll go to Walter’s.”

Writing about a Nice Family (That’s Not Boring)

I take issue with the opening line from Anna Karenina: “All happy families are alike; all unhappy families are unhappy in their own way.” I think a happy family is happy in their own, unique way. But I understand Mr. Tolstoy’s point. Writing about a nice family that’s not boring can be more challenging than writing about a miserable one. Writers think they have more to work with when they create unhappy characters within a family. But as long as the kind members of a family aren’t perfect, and writers don’t shield them from unhappy events, nice families can prove just as interesting as unhappy families. I’ve learned this writing about the Malinowski family in my Rae Riley mystery series.

Not Every Member of a Family Always Gets Along

Even when they love each other. You know from your own experience that there are times when you’re in conflict with some relative. Creating believable conflicts between loving characters adds a lot of interest and tension to a story.

My amateur detective Rae Riley has recently found her father, Mal, and his family. Her father’s mother, sisters, and brother-in-law have been very warm and welcoming. But … in my latest mystery, A Storm of Doubts, Rae’s Aunt Carrie, Mal’s younger sister, is angry at her brother. She’s angry with him for keeping such a huge secret as fathering a child in high school. She’s angry because she feels like she doesn’t know him any more. But more than that, Carrie’s angry that there’s more to Rae’s story that she and Mal aren’t revealing.

So although the siblings love each other, they have a giant problem to resolve that is subplot for my mystery. And because of that love, neither one of them can go off the deep end and do something like spread lies about the other. They may hurt each other, but the family love keeps them trying to fix their problem, instead of sabotaging each other.

In my other Rae Riley mysteries, I’ve established the close relationships Rae is developing with Mal. But that doesn’t mean they can’t have conflict. A major plot line in A Storm of Doubts is Rae’s habit of feeling sorry for people in trouble and trying to help them. Since Mal is the sheriff and seen a lot of life’s ugly side as a cop, he wants her to stay safe.

Their conflict not only makes their relationship real, it also underlines their love. If Mal didn’t care for Rae, he’d let her help whoever she wanted and leave her to clean up her own mess when it goes wrong.

What happy family in fiction is your favorite?

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