Using Touch in Our Stories

Touch is another sense that writers tend to overlook.  In the story “The Price of Light”, author Ellis Peters brings medieval England to life through the senses and especially through texture. Once I sat down to analyze touch, I realized it encompasses many different kinds of sensation and using touch in our stories will bring extra depth to our descriptions.

Texture

Not only clothes, but everything we touch has some kind of texture, if we think about it. The table I’m eating on, the chair I’m sitting on, the jacket of the woman I brush up against in a crowded mall, the goop my kid just invented in the basement. If the point of view (POV) character is touching something, I can switch from sight to touch to give my description variety.

I’m sensitive to food textures. Regardless of how a food tastes, if the texture triggers my gag reflex, I’m done with it. In fact, I will soldier through food that doesn’t taste good, but I can’t choke it down if the texture is bad. Marshmallows and meringue are two foods with textures I literally can’t swallow.

Air

The temperature and moisture of the air around us is sensed through our skin. So instead of limiting myself to how a snowy scene looks, I will add how the cold makes my POV character feel. Humidity can be described the same way. Instead of writing how the sweat glistens on someone’s face, I will write about how humidity wraps around my skin like a wet quilt. When describing wind, I can switch to how it feels, rather than the effects the character sees or hears.

“Humidity had risen, dogging us like a whiny kid.”

from A Storm of Doubts by JPC Allen

Pressure

Pressure on the skin signals all kinds of emotions. If you want large man to intimidate your small main character, he can press against her, crowding her, trapping her. A squeeze of the hand can mean reassurance, a slap on the back affection or anger, a handshake, depending upon the strength, friendship or fury.

I know I haven’t exhausted the possibilities. What tips do you have about writing about the sense of touch?

“My grip driving the receiver into the flesh of my palm, I spun

away from her.”

from “Bovine” by JPC Allen

For more posts on using the sense in our stories, click here.

How to Use May in a Story

This year, May beats March as my least favorite month. It’s not the weather, which has been warm and pleasant. I think I’m just more than ready to be done with school. But there’s a lot more to May than just praying for the end of the school year. Below are ideas on how to use May in a story.

Mother’s Day

With this holiday, which, by the way, was created by a distant relative of mine, you can explore female relationships within a family.  One approach could be to structure the story over successive Mother’s Days, showing how the celebration reflects the relationships.

Memorial Day

This is another holiday which lead to an examination of family relationships. Your focus can be on those relatives who have served our country or any family members who have passed away. Over the years, my kids and I have traveled with my parents to West Virginia to lay flowers on the graves of my grandparents, great-grandparents, and great-great grandparents. West Virginia is the “Old Country” for my family and I’m so pleased to be able to share this family history with my kids.

I can see short story set at a cemetery where relatives who are estranged are laying flowers on the tombstones. In the process, they talk and become reconciled, burying their antagonism.

Graduation

As a member of the high school band, I attended more graduation ceremonies than is healthy for one individual to endure. But being an observer, rather than a participant, in the ceremony gave me a great position to people watch. You can develop a story where the main character, sitting with the band, makes some discoveries about fellow classmates and their families.

Of course, graduation ceremonies are the perfect way to kick off or end a story about the students who are receiving their diplomas. Since the ceremony is usually serious, writing about one where everything goes wrong would be fun. A thunderstorm threatened my high school graduation, and as the speakers kept talking, the entire student body and crowd in the football stadium watched as the black clouds piled up to the west.

Last Day of School

When I was in junior high and high school, I noticed a change during the last few days or even weeks. Everyone relaxes, at least a bit. The teachers know they can’t teach any more. The kids know the teacher have lowered their expectations concerning learning. My mom would ease up on our night time routine. 

As the evenings in May grew long and golden, I could sense the finality of what was happening. I never regretted a school year ending; I came to hate school by the time I was in eighth grade. But it did seem like a time for reflection, looking back and looking ahead.

This thoughtful time is suitable for a story about a student who has regrets or maybe wants to accomplish something before the year ends, a teacher facing retirement, or a parent whose youngest child is finishing high school.

This day also has enormous writing inspiration for comedy with everyone from teachers to kids marking time until dismissal. Many schools offer a Field Day during the last week, so combining an event like that with the last day provides loads of opportunities for comic complications.

How could you use May in a story?

For more writing prompts for holidays, click here.

Follow My Blog Tour To Enter the Drawing …

… for the prize package in the picture, starting May 4. It includes the two Rae Riley mystery novels as well as the two anthologies in which I have Rae Riley mystery short stories. All the books will be signed. You’ll also win a tumbler full of buckeye candies–they’re chocolate and peanut butter for those of you who don’t live in the Buckeye State– and $25 Amazon gift card.

To enter, comment at the blog stops listed below. The more places you comment, the better your chances of winning. Eight of the stops have interviews in which you’ll learn tidbits and behind the scenes info about me, my writing, and the next Rae Riley novel. If you leave a comment, I’ll be sure to answer it!

Stories By Gina, May 4 (Author Interview)

Book Reviews From an Avid Reader, May 5

Artistic Nobody, May 6 (Author Interview)

Truth and Grace Homeschool Academy, May 7

Jodie Wolfe – Stories Where Hope and Quirky Meet, May 8 (Author Interview)

The Lofty Pages, May 8

Beauty in the Binding, May 9 (Author Interview)

Library Lady’s Kid Lit, May 10

Guild Master, May 11 (Author Interview)

Locks, Hooks and Books, May 12

A Reader’s Brain , May 13 (Author Interview)

For Him and My Family, May 13

Texas Book-aholic, May 14

For the Love of Literature, May 15 (Author Interview)

Debbie’s Dusty Deliberations, May 16

Vicky Sluiter, May 17 (Author Interview)

Using Sound in Our Stories

This month, the theme for my blog is writing using the senses, and I’m starting with using sound in our stories. Sound is probably the most used sense after sight, and I find I rely on it a lot. Below are some tips on using sound in our stories.

How Do Characters Sound?

For some reason, the quality of a person’s voice catches my attention. An unusually deep voice for a man. A high, piping voice in a child. When writing dialogue, I like to incorporate how a character sounds, if it aids readers in imaging that character. Here are some ways I use sound for characters in my Rae Riley Mysteries.

  • My main character Rae Riley has a slight Southern accent, which is noticeable now that she lives in Ohio.
  • Her friend Houston, who’s originally from Texas, speaks with that accent in a drawl.
  • Her boss Barb speaks in a “crisp clip” when talking to someone she doesn’t like.
  • Mal, Rae’s dad, has a voice that is a “penetrating” or “booming baritone”.
  • Rae’s great-grandfather Walter has a “harsh voice … so deep it seemed to echo in his throat.”

Sounds Add Suspense

One reason sounds add suspense is that, as beings who rely primarily on sight, hearing something only, depending on the setting, can be scary. At the climax of A Storm of Doubts, Rae is caught in a storm at night. She has to rely on what she hears far more than what she sees, adding to the suspense. (I’d tell you more, but a ruined mystery is one of the saddest stories there is, and my publisher would not be pleased.)

Quiet Heightens Importance

I learned this technique from an old movie called The Uninvited from 1944. A brother and sister buy a home on the English coast that’s stood empty for 15 years. After they move in, they experience weird happenings and conclude two ghosts haunt their home. They dig into the past to discover why.

In one scene, the local doctor is flipping through the personal journals of the late doctor from whom he bought the practice. A journal entry reveals that the late doctor suspected a respectable nurse, who now owns a successful health retreat, let a patient die. There’s a moment of quiet as the local doctor, the brother and sister, as well as the audience, absorb the enormity of this fact. It lasts a couple of seconds, and then the housekeeper intrudes with a telephone message.

I wrote the literary equivalent of that scene in Storm. A woman has disappeared from the rural Ohio county where Rae lives with Mal, who is the sheriff. They are discussing the case with Mal’s sister, Carrie, a private investigator. Carrie thinks it’s possible the missing woman is dead.

Dad gave her a steady gaze. “That seems more likely with each passing day.”

Micah’s and Gram’s muffled voices drifted through the floor as I clutched myself and the harsh light picked out the concern on their faces.

I like using a normal sound like a muffled discussion between family members as a counterpoint to something as awful as the disappearance and death of this woman.

Writers, how to you use sound in your stories? Readers, what book uses sounds well?

Write the First Lines for this Scene

My last photo prompt for this month’s theme of beginnings is to write the first lines for this scene from the point of view of one of the people in the photo. Whom do you choose? The woman? The young man beside her or the one with a satchel? Here’s my inspiration:

I started as a young guy with a mask slipped his arm around my waist. “Pretend you know me.” He whispered. “It’s a matter of life and death.”

Mine or his?

I pulled away, but his dark eyes above the mask caught mine. They didn’t look like they belonged to a creep on the hunt. They looked scared.

For more prompts to begin a story, click here.

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